1) Type up your teacher comments from your first draft - these are your main targets that you must address.
www:excellent use of embedded quotes; very detailed research.
ebi:page references for every quote. sort bibliography-formatting in places -don't repeat sources in works cited/consulted-put websites in order. Other feminist theories e.g Butler and more on wider context - how society changes & why.
Aiming for: 46, level 4
3) Write a numbered action plan of at least five things - ideally one for each of the eight EBIs you received in feedback in your Peer Assessment lessons - that you will do or change for your second draft that will help you get there.
- correct all minor errors such as grammar, spelling etc.
- correct all footnotes and look for page numbers
- start deconstructing the essay; create flow
- more research
- create a a new paragraph on transgender issues
- include more on wider contexts
- Embed more feminist/gender theory
- Look at more moving image texts
Here is the peer assessment lessons PowerPoint to help you check you've covered everything:
1) Why did you choose this particular recreation and how does it link to your main production?
I choose to recreate 'If....', as it is a 1968 British film, including themes of violence and crime. This links to my main production as I will be recreating film posters from the 60s.
2) What difficulties did you face in producing this recreation?
I had difficulties finding the right model.
3) What are the strengths of the production?
Visually strong - it was true to the original poster.
4) What aspects would you look to improve?
'Adding soldiers in the title' to make it exactly alike.
5) What lessons will you take from this process that will help you with your main production?
Paying more attention to detail.
6) Now that you are ready to start your actual linked production, explain clearly what you will be creating and how confident you are in delivering this.
I will be recreating film posters from the 60s; this will include experimental and classical design.
